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Saturday Afternoon
On Saturday afternoon me and my family drove to Whangarei for my sister's 7th birthday. In Whangarei we walked to ‘Flip out.’ There were lots of kids and it was loud. Also there was a tv that told us things not to do like don't bring your phone inside.
First we walked to basketball but the tramp was not that bouncy. It was hard to get a ball in the hoop. I found a way to get the ball in the hoop by standing on a ledge and shooting it. It worked a lot later on.
I found dodge ball with lots of balls to throw but my sister was the first to get me. It was amazing. After that I went to see the airbag and it was huge. I jumped off the car and I faced the airbag. My brother did the same and it was soft. Eventually we went to the arcade and played lots of games but my favorite was the candy machine. It had lots of candy. It was like candy land there. It was awesome. Then we went to the park and we played hide and seek with my cousins and sister Hazel, DJ, kaya , Kullen and Margaret. Finally we went home. I asked my nanny if we could do that for my birthday and she said, “Sure.”
When it is my birthday I'll do the same.
I really enjoyed my day. It was fantastic.
